Grace in the Garden

Over in the Garden, Grace prompted us to write a form I had not heard of.  I was intrigued. I started my poem, but life got in the way.  My hubby wanted to take the boat out. I do not go very often, he will leave at 5am and come home by 1-2 pm looking like a Lobster.  I normally go when the kids go tubing-but they were working.   Thankfully the Captain made some finally checks before we left. Smoke rolling out of the battery is never a good sign.  And neither is it fun to have brakes over heat in a trailer and smell that horrible acrid smell.  Fun, did happen, when we took our hound out in the boat. He thought geese might be hopeful rabbits.  We actually have a store we pull into along Intercoastal  highway, to allow our dog to visit grass and we can stretch our sea legs.  I bought cold old fashioned Rootbeer and old fashion penny candy.  It is more like nickle and dime, now. 

Grace shared this form:

We are going to tackle a nine-line poem, called the rictameter.   The first 5 lines are very similar to a cinquain.   The rictameter pattern of syllables per line goes like this:  2,4,6,8,10,8,6,4,2.    Also, the first and last lines must be the same.

History of the Rictameter:

Created in the early 1990s by two cousins, Jason D. Wilkins and Richard W. Lunsford, Jr., for a poetry contest that was held as a weekly practice of their self-invented order, The Brotherhood of the Amarantos Mystery. The order was inspired by the Robin Williams movie Dead Poets Society.

The first examples of the rictameter form to be made public were submissions made by Jason Wilkins to the website www.shadowpoetry.com in 2000. 

 

 

Satin
As your lips are
Pressed to mine as velvet
Soft and full with rounded sweetness
Two gentle petals alive with the night
Misted in the summer beauty
Of rains that shower love
'Pon your lips of
Satin  

Copyright © 2000 Jason Wilkins

What a pretty form and to think this was developed so currently, by two cousins, who are part of a mysterious order-how fun! 

 * My daughter and her boyfriend trying to hang on. My husband had just spun them around.  Yes, he was doing doughnuts in a bass boat!

Fishtail    

 legs spinning air

Swan song signals enough

water kissed confetti falls 

Flamenco dance prefers flamingo stance

Crane stretches on sugared shore

perpendicular hold

sailboat lens view

Fishtail 

© Ellen Wilson

Teen peacocks hanging out in a pick-up truck.  The gorgeous male is hidden. 

 

Gossipy

teens hanging out

 pick up dreams of escape

maybe she will drive us to the wild blue wonder

what kind of bird is she with a long zoom nose

Raven hair and a clicking tongue

oh, she is wearing red-Blue's favorite

ruffled feathers

Gossipy

© Ellen Wilson

This is Blue, yes that is his name.  I frequent the Farmer's Market and the owner was telling me about her peacocks.  He is gorgeous, and yes his favorite color is Red.   She told me they were all teens and terrible acting.  I discovered them sitting in the back of a pick-up truck.  Blue is hidden, you can see his head to the right of the orange cone.  My daughter and I were laughing so hard trying to get them to move.  I took a bunch of photos-lots of clicking noise.  They kept tilting their heads and staring at us.  I bet they wondered what kind of birds were we, in a blue Honda wearing red.  lol