Over in the Garden, Kerry challenged us to write a Sonnet. Two famous poets who write Sonnets: Petrache and Pablo Neruda. I broke rules and tried to follow more of a Pablo Neruda poem-but it didn't come out, as I hoped. I might let it steep and try again. I started out in the traditional sense with rhyme. I liked it, but had to count syllables to make it work. Even though I broke the rules-I am okay with what I am sharing.
It is odd, because the direction I was headed in also aligns with another theme.
I'm curious what do you think it is about?
TARNISHED MIRROR
Day dreamer what lifts haze off
the coast of your prow?
Milky Way poured into your delicate bone china
cup
envoy conveys tradition into Earl
Grey's mood
Steeped memories on a salty sea of
blue
dance like clouds lifting and twirling
their skirts
Mourning gray dove soars proud- there's land ahead
as black infused clouds roll into tepid
view
High tea mood composed in botanical
rain
as notable White Crowned Sparrow pecks
the tea tray
morning Zen opens like a shiny quartz rose
later moon sails tilt-reflecting their
silver polished leaf
Tempered English ghost your
guide:
blue whale migrates by small barrier
reef
light ripples as winking stars warn
over exposure
Tarnished mirror an ancestral thief
© Ellen Wilson
Comments
I hope you do not ever know this dance-me either! It isn't good...
Hugs and chocolate,
Shelly
I always did poorly in school when I had to interpret poetry. I like it for the sound and beautiful word combinations. The last stanza alludes to death, but I otherwise have no clue.
It's so nice to read your writing again. Thanks for stopping by my blog, Ella. It nudged me in the right direction (i.e., over here).
Be well.
xoRobyn
Perhaps the references to the sea might allude to the broken reflections we see when we look at ourselves in the water? Please forgive me if I'm way off. =D
"notable White Crowned Sparrow pecks the tea tray
morning Zen opens like a shiny quartz rose
later moon sails tilt-reflecting their silver polished leaf"
I just love the balance in this of life, reflections and the mention of rose-quartz...love it!!
* *counting syllables is not fun!
Helen-I am happy-I hope these were wonderful memories! :D Thank you~
Wanda-Yes, lost at sea is right!
Thank you~ :D
Hannah-I picked a rare bird to symbolize those rare moments the memory is sharp and in focus! I hope we all remember the shiny bits our lives~ Thank you Hannah! <3
Bjorn-Thank you so much :D You made me smile~
Cynthia-It is a broken reflection as we lose our memories, our focus fades~ :D Thank you...
Susie-Thank you so much! I loved your tulip poem...I'll be by~ I went to the city this morning and am behind! :D
Robyn-It was fun to visit you~ I love peacocks and that car-wow~
Thank you so much! YOU are on target...the curse of our genes!
I kept using tea as a reference to silver linings. I think poetry should be what you see. I thought analyzing interesting...but I feel it is more a secret language. We see what we want to it in. It might
conjure a mood or memory! I was just curious what people saw when they read it. Thank you for sharing and your compliment made my week! xo I am happy to nudge
:D How though?
Margaret-well there is treasure n' sadness to those wrecks, but the real wreck is losing one's mind.
Shelly-Thank you! Yes, I thought how tea can comfort or scald us-just like our memories~ xo :D
Hugs n' tea to you~
Sherry-Thank you! We have to have stars with the sea ;D lol
Thank you Sherry-yes, the magic of blue-you know it well!!!
Peggy-Yes, I like your thoughts on dreams-I do think our memories arrive in our daydreams. Thank you for your thoughts~
Kerry-Thank you! Yes, the sea n' tea have a lot to tell ;D
Dezzy-How poetic! I bet you could write poetry ;D
Thank you~
Grapeling-Yes, I went deep sea diving on this one ;D Thank you~
Alex-You always make me smile! There could be several themes actually. I thought of Alzheimer's and Alcoholism. They both distort one's perception.
I do want the mirror you found in my poem! lol ;D
I hope you are doing well~
Crazy weather in my neck of the woods~